Welcome to our newly upgraded forum! it may look a little different, but hopefully you'll find it easy to navigate and enjoyable to use. There are a number of new features - so please feel free to experiment.

If you've had difficulty registering in the past, please try again, as the new software addresses most of of our registration issues. If you have any questions, please send us an email and we'll investigate.

Word Dancing

They say a poem's not really a poem until you share it with someone else. And that's what this place is all about.
Post Reply < PreviousNext > [phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1266: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable
User avatar
Laura Sue
Beautiful Soul
Posts: 253
Joined: October 24, 2009, 7:33 am
Location: CT, USA
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1266: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Post by Laura Sue » October 28, 2009, 8:35 am

I want to dance with words.
I'll wrap myself round
them and tango.

I want to weave words
into a shimmering shawl,
I can wear when I waltz at midnight.

I want words that stand at attention
and parade with me to
"Stars and Stripes Forever."

I want to lay down in the cool grass
with scented words strewn over me
like sweet Jasmine blossoms,

when I'm tired from the dancing.

Laura Sue Lasala - Rev. 2007 (my poems are never finished :D

User avatar
nia
Beautiful Soul
Posts: 256
Joined: May 30, 2009, 5:25 am
Location: Turkey, Istanbul
Contact:

Post by nia » October 28, 2009, 10:05 am

Laura Sue wrote:
I want to dance with words.
I'll wrap myself round
them and tango.

I want to weave words
into a shimmering shawl,
I can wear when I waltz
at midnight.

I want words to stand strongly
and parade with me to
"Stars and Stripes Forever."

And then I want to lay down
in the cool grass
with scented words strewn over me
like sweet Jasmine blossoms,

when I'm tired from the dancing.

Laura Sue Lasala - Rev. 2007 (my poems are never finished :D
Wonderful poem dear Laura Sue, I really whispered same as these talking lines... I wanted my words to dance too :) Just you can find some suggestions from my humble mind. But it doesn't mean should be like that, just how I read in my mind these lines. It is just an idea. And Laura Sue, the ending part fascinated. Especially when I read this aloud! You really did great piece.

Thank you,
with my love,
nia
"My religion is very simple. My religion is kindness." Dalai Lama
http://knitting-diary-of-nia.blogspot.com/
http://blue-silence-of-nia.blogspot.com

User avatar
Lion~*
Everything In Moderation
Posts: 1892
Joined: February 2, 2004, 1:52 pm
Location: Canada
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1266: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Post by Lion~* » October 28, 2009, 12:44 pm

Laura, It sounds finished to me. That is the beauty of expression... you can say little or a great deal and what is said stands for what it is. I look forward to reading more of your mind's work! ;)

love Lion~*
Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart...William Wordsworth

Follow your honest convictions, and stay strong. - William Thackeray

The bottom line, especially for my character,
is the issue of unconditional love.”
Matthew Weeden

mwzephyr
Beautiful Soul
Posts: 544
Joined: April 21, 2009, 6:25 am
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1266: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Post by mwzephyr » October 28, 2009, 1:56 pm

Laura,
Thank you for sharing your vision of the dance and melody of your song.
Pray thee, we wait not long for more.
~sparrow

User avatar
ladybird
Beautiful Soul
Posts: 1115
Joined: September 17, 2007, 2:41 am
Location: New Zealand
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1266: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Post by ladybird » October 28, 2009, 3:47 pm

Dear (((((Laura Sue)))))

Breathtakingly beautiful...enchanting and magical

mega thanx for sharing!!!

love from a blissed
ladybird luv
Sunshine surrounds the earth as love surrounds our souls. ~Amethyst Snow-Rivers

User avatar
Liebestraum
Cosmic Dreamer
Posts: 1303
Joined: January 17, 2007, 12:10 am
Location: Italy
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1266: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Post by Liebestraum » October 30, 2009, 2:32 pm

Dear Laura Sue,
this is really enchanting, you were beautifully inspired.

The words do love you as a choreographer!

Love,
Margherita :)
Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love.
(Rumi)

Post Reply < PreviousNext >
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1266: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1266: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 2 guests