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Haiku (unpublished)

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Davidf
Beautiful Soul
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Post by Davidf » June 30, 2013, 4:41 am

I know this is really not a haiku, maybe some can help me turn it into one:
Skeleton key
The one to unlock
All my hopes and dreams.
~Davidf
Have a blessed day!

Davidf
Beautiful Soul
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Joined: January 22, 2010, 4:41 pm
Location: Islandia, NY

Post by Davidf » July 6, 2013, 10:19 pm

Here's a second unpublished haiku
Whistling wind
Branches of a palm tree
Utopia restored.
~Davidf
Have a blessed day!

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Liebestraum
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Location: Italy

Post by Liebestraum » January 21, 2015, 2:18 pm

Considering that many contemporary poets do not adhere anymore to the structure 5-7-5 syllables (or sounds), your two haiku are very good, I would say.

They are full of impact and complete.

Margherita :)
Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love.
(Rumi)

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