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Cycle of Faith

They say a poem's not really a poem until you share it with someone else. And that's what this place is all about.
STAReye
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Post by STAReye » November 5, 2013, 9:26 pm

No wheel to turn
no companion
empty space
like a lost coin
treasured in hiding
her absence hurts
my heart aches
yearning for her return
longing
like parched lips for water
even dew drops
before the sun rises
and I call her name
reminisce good times
as I walk along
musing
my cycle of faith.

Davidf
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Post by Davidf » November 6, 2013, 6:03 am

Leonard,
The last 5 lines are the best in this poem, in my opinion.
~Davidf
Have a blessed day!

mwzephyr
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Post by mwzephyr » November 6, 2013, 4:20 pm

I really like the evocation of feeling that you have shared in your poem.
Thank you!
~Zep

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Lion~*
Everything In Moderation
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Post by Lion~* » November 14, 2013, 2:30 pm

I wonder just how many can fill in the reply ... * He wrote my life* ... the whole world filled with unique individuals who share so many emotionally recognized happenings.
Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart...William Wordsworth

Follow your honest convictions, and stay strong. - William Thackeray

The bottom line, especially for my character,
is the issue of unconditional love.”
Matthew Weeden

STAReye
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Post by STAReye » November 19, 2013, 5:53 pm

Janice, ~Zep & ~ Davidf: thank you for your comments. Appreciated.

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Post by jjbreunig3 » November 21, 2013, 9:04 am

An enjoyable piece; loved the various methaphors that lightly touch upon the issues of the spiritual heart; as I read lines, I could easily envision applicable stories of the Bible; well conceived poem.

-Joe Breunig,
Reaching Towards His Unbounded Glory
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Logic, when applied to people, fails miserably. --Joseph J. Breunig 3rd

STAReye
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Post by STAReye » November 22, 2013, 10:19 am

I'm glad you liked this poem, -Joe. Thank you for your comments.

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