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Dance

They say a poem's not really a poem until you share it with someone else. And that's what this place is all about.
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Post by brooke » January 31, 2008, 2:01 pm

Im new and poetry is my passion but ive never made anything ive written available for anyone but myself to read, forgive me if its not the best, its just something i love to do.
i hope it gives you the same feeling poetry gives me,
enjoy!
and critisism is welcome

Dance

It began,

a single silvery drop,

falling.

soon,

in its place another droplet falls,

with a gentle grace,

not quite as far.

a mezmerizing creation,

as light glints softly off a crystalline structure.

as if to a silent beat,

one by one they fall.

Creating beauty in a midst.

For as the translucent diamonds fall to an end in seccession,

their majesty is preserved with natures smooth graceful dance.

In their place appears a single shining icicle,

and the dance is revealed,

as the dance goes on.

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Post by LadySolaris » February 1, 2008, 12:06 am

Brooke,

I loved your poem. It is a rhythmic rendition of natural thought. As you welcome criticism, here are my thoughts: it is absolutely refreshing to see a young mind find words and innocent cadence to describe the amazement at nature and its simple yet intricate workings. Write from your heart and find simplicity. I look forward to read more.

I give you my best wishes for your future lyrical endeavors!

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Post by ladybird » February 1, 2008, 1:55 pm

Dear (((Brooke))),

...Mega thanx for sharing that pawesome poem of yours!!!...

...Beautiful imagery and a very enjoyable read!!!

...I loooovvvveeee it!!!

...A warm welcome to the Peak and its truly a joy to see ya here!!!This is a purrfect place for poetry from the heart and quotes from the imagination...a heavenly oasis for the soul....

love ladybird luv

In the depth of your hopes and desires lies your silent knowledge of the beyond; And like seeds dreaming beneath the snow, your heart dreams of spring. Trust the dreams, for in them is hidden the gate to eternity...
~ Kahlil Gibran
Sunshine surrounds the earth as love surrounds our souls. ~Amethyst Snow-Rivers

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Post by brooke » February 5, 2008, 3:08 pm

thank you ladybird and lady solaris!!

i feel very welcomed :)

and thanks for the encouragment as well it means alot

luv
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Post by Mammy » February 6, 2008, 4:05 am

Hi Brooke

Welcome :D

I love your poem. It's beautifully crafted.

Don't be shy about sharing more! :) :)

Mammy x x

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Post by Hollyberry » February 6, 2008, 10:46 am

Brooke,

What a beautiful piece. Very eloquent and lovely!
Hope to read more.

Thanks for sharing.

Holly :)
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Post by Lion~* » February 11, 2008, 9:14 pm

Very lovely Brooke! So glad you have opened up your soul and are sharing it with us! What a delight that is within you!

Love Lion~*
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Post by Morning Bear » February 12, 2008, 6:06 pm

Your time has come to step out from behind the veil
Exhibiting what is beautiful and real
The thoughts you write down for all to see
Are truly a blessing to them and me
We're glad you are here to add to the shine
With heart and soul that are truly sublime.

Oh well - I just felt like rhyming something to welcome you and let you know that we are very glad to have you. Your poem is delicate and lovely.

Morning Bear
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